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March 22nd, 2009, 1:29 am

Average Rating: 4.00
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Reply AnXjak, March 22nd, 2009, 1:37 am

Whoz that number 8 awesomeguy 8D

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Reply RenTech, March 22nd, 2009, 3:11 am

Is the team good

Reply Shadow Lugia, March 22nd, 2009, 8:23 am

Lol. My school's Football team is the falcons.

Nice comic tho.;

Reply Elastikid, March 22nd, 2009, 4:46 pm

Some advice This is one of the more high-quality sprite comics I've seen. 4/5.

You have very good grammar and your characters don't all look the same. That alone is a good start.

I just have a few small tidbits of advice.

Item one. In a world full of animal sprites, there's a football team called "The Falcons?" That would be like if in real life, a football team was called "The Humans." There are plenty of non-Animal names you can use. Like "The Avengers" or "The Crushers."

Item two. Is there any reason why the color of the speaker's dialogue changes from white to red within A SINGLE FRAME to orange the next frame, and then back to white again in the last frame? Usually in sprite comics, different colored dialogue means a different speaker. So keep the main character's dialogue orange, or white, but not both.

I know I seem like I'm nitpicking, but changing these small little things would make your comic all the better.

Reply The Neroe, March 22nd, 2009, 4:49 pm

Thing one: IN RL, many teams are named after animals :/ My Jr high school team was named the Mustangs, i've seen The steeds, and the bears before. It's not that uncommon... But i see what you're getting at... kinda o:

Thing 2: It`s glowing red because you couldn`t see it before i made it glow, and its important text for later. It`s only surrounded by orange when he`s there. But once again, i see what you`re gettingat.

Reply Elastikid, March 22nd, 2009, 4:52 pm

Glad I could help.

Reply Lugbzurg, August 16th, 2009, 8:43 pm

It does seem a bit odd to have a Football team called "The Falcons" in a world of humanoid animal types. It probably makes most feel proud and some feel left out.

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